The First Coming

For some time I’ve been toying with the idea of writing some fiction. I don’t want to take on too much, so the flash fiction genre seems an ideal place to start. Flash fiction has several definitions, but I’m taking the most restrictive (and easiest to finish!): stories of 100 words maximum. This is my first effort to be shared, and you may recognise where I borrowed the idea from: it’s a modern day reworking of a well-known story! I hope you like it.


“You what?!” screamed Mary, at the Stranger who had just appeared from nowhere. “I can’t be! I’ve never done it with anyone, not even Joe.”

“Trust me,” the Stranger said, “I have it on the highest authority.”

“No f***ing way!” Mary shouted, and stomped off angrily.

But on the way home she started thinking more calmly; “Maybe it’ll be OK, Joe and I both want kids.” But then reality dawned: he’d never believe her. There was only one thing for it: she was going to need a new trackie and to get her teeth done for the Jeremy Kyle Show.

20 thoughts on “The First Coming

  1. Madelyn Griffith-Haynie, MCC, SCAC December 16, 2017 / 10:26 am

    Well done, and very clever, Clive. I find the short pieces MUCH more difficult than the longer ones, however. I could probably write an entire novel in the time it would take me to edit a piece of fiction DOWN to under 100 words – lol.
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    • Clive December 16, 2017 / 10:30 am

      Thanks Madelyn. I quite enjoyed the challenge, as I tend to be too wordy in my writing and the discipline involved with this was good for me. Maybe I should try that more often! It’s like the famous Oscar Wilde quote: “I’m sorry I didn’t have time to write you a shorter letter.” xx

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      • Clive December 16, 2017 / 11:35 am

        It’s good, isn’t it. He actually wrote that in a letter to a friend, I don’t remember who. The man was a genius with words xx


    • Clive December 12, 2017 / 2:24 pm

      Thanks Brigid. It just seemed to fit the zeitgeist 😊

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    • Clive December 9, 2017 / 8:44 am

      Thank you, I’ve done one more since then, not exactly prolific! 😉 xx

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      • Osyth December 9, 2017 / 1:10 pm

        Quality old chap … that’s the thing, quality not quantity 😉 xx

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      • Clive December 9, 2017 / 1:19 pm

        Precisely! It’s a hard task to produce more than one 100 word piece a year, innit 😂 xx

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      • Clive December 9, 2017 / 2:09 pm

        Yup. At this rate I’ll have enough for a book by the next millennium 😉 xx

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    • Clive December 8, 2017 / 7:15 pm

      Just a little updating for our modern times 😉


  2. Clive December 8, 2017 / 6:05 pm

    Reblogged this on Take It Easy and commented:

    I was tidying up some of my old posts, and came across this one from a couple of years ago, well before most current readers had joined me. As I said at the time, it isn’t exactly an original story, but it was my first ever effort at any kind of fiction, so please be kind to me!

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  3. jenniesisler December 3, 2015 / 9:51 pm

    This is great! I’m pretty sure it would play out this way in 2015. Found your post on the Blogher Facebook page. 🙂

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    • Clive December 3, 2015 / 9:52 pm

      Thank you! Sadly, I think you’re right!


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